2012年MBA全國聯考英語作文寫作演練與點評

　　1 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should：

　　1. describe the drawing，

　　2. interpret its meaning， and

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　該文可分三段來寫。第一段描述圖畫。第二段分析城市化帶來的嚴重后果。第三段談解決問題的辦法。This picture leaves a deep impression on me： a skyscraper， like a beast with sharp teeth， is pulling a big tree completely out of the earth. Anyone who has seen this picture will realize that urbanization has made a serious impact on the environment.

　　Although urbanization has improved our quality of life in many aspects， we must be aware that it has also brought about a series of unfavorable consequences. First， the farmland in the country is shrinking. For one thing， some rural areas become cities during the process of urbanization， chiefly because they are near big cities and thus included in the urban development plan. For another， more and more rural people are now working in the cities. They bring advanced technology back to their homeland and the land may serve diversified purposes nowadays. Second， sometimes， the rural land， rivers and air are polluted. When more and more new factories are set up， the surrounding environment is likely to decay.

　　In my mind， it is not necessarily the result. First， if urban planners take the environment into consideration before the actual construction stage， the present situation will be much better. Second， every citizen should be both the advocator and the practitioner of environment protection. Third， laws and regulations should be established to punish those environment violators severely. Only when such measures are implemented will cities take on a better look and bring all of us a better life.第一段首句描述圖畫，并在第二句中點出了圖畫說明的社會問題——城市化對環境帶來的負面影響。

　　第二段首句是段落統領句，該句旨在引出下文的嚴重后果。可是城市化是有利有弊甚至利大于弊的事情，如果不想談有利的方面，就可以使用一個讓步狀語從句，從而不失客觀。這里請大家用心領悟。而后分兩方面來說：一是耕地減少，二是環境污染。

　　第三段首句別具一格，是特殊的段落統領句，與傳統的辦法類統領句根據不同情況加以使用，可取得良好效果。比如說，如果圖畫給人的沖擊很大，就可以使用一些主觀色彩較強的句型來感染讀者。而后分城市規劃者、民眾和法律三方面來說，條理非常清晰。最后一句是結語，包括一個平行結構和“城市讓生活更美好”的理念，請大家體會。在準備大作文的過程中，大家慢慢可將具體步驟和相應的時間確立下來。熟悉操作步驟，能極大地提高效率和成功的概率。拿到題目之后，一是看圖讀圖，一是看指令。綜合考慮后將主題確定下來，就可以構造文章的整體結構了。之后考慮每段大致分成幾點來寫。如果熟悉這個過程，速度是非常快的。在這上面節省下來的時間，可以被用在對詞句的斟酌之上。這樣主動權掌握在自己手里，考試中就會有穩定的發揮了。

[FS:PAGE]　　漫畫的抽象度逐年增加，這是不爭的事實。之所以不會增加太快，且中間有所反復（如08年的比07年的抽象度低），是為了不讓大量學生跑題。但是如果不訓練自己的理解力，就可能在下面的考試中吃大虧。

　　我們之所以還不能靈活地駕馭語言，是因為接觸得不夠多，沒有采用“沉浸式”的方法。深刻的體驗才會讓我們懂得語言之美，大量的“讀、背、仿、寫、改”的體驗才能讓我們的語感有大幅提高，這才是真正的寫作之道。